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Dear Editor: How Can I Write More Vivid Prose?

—(Originally appeared in Publishers Weekly)— In her latest column, BookWorks founder and veteran editor, Betty Kelly Sargent, offers some tips to a reader on how to create vivid, memorable prose. Dear Editor: People sometimes tell me my prose is a bit drab and colorless. Any suggestions on what I could do about that?  —Phillip S…. [Read More]

How to write more colorful prose by Betty Kelly Sargent for BookWorks.com

—(Originally appeared in Publishers Weekly)—

In her latest column, BookWorks founder and veteran editor, Betty Kelly Sargent, offers some tips to a reader on how to create vivid, memorable prose.

Dear Editor:

People sometimes tell me my prose is a bit drab and colorless. Any suggestions on what I could do about that? 

—Phillip S.

Engage the Reader's Senses

How to write more colorful prose by Betty Kelly Sargent for BookWorks.comOne great way to liven up your prose is to use it to wake up your reader’s five senses—sight, sound, smell, touch, and taste. Tell the reader about your character’s twinkling violet eyes, the eerie whistle of the distant freight train, the scent of the cinnamon buns baking in the oven, the feel of the lush, scarlet velvet cushion, the taste of those cinnamon buns.

Take a look at these two sentences from Manhattan Beach by Jennifer Egan:

“Reversing directions, they confronted wild celebration in the western sky: streaks of gaudy pink like the delayed aftermath of a fireworks show. The sand was pink, too, as if it had absorbed the sunset and was releasing it slowly.”

And Richard Ford, in describing a beach scene in Independence Day says,

”Tiny, stick-figure boys stand, bare-chested at the margins of the small surf, shading their eyes as dogs trot by, tanned joggers jog and elderlies in pastel garb stroll behind them in the fractured light. Here is human hum in the barely moving air and sure-sigh, the low scrim of radio notes and water subsiding over words spoken in whispers.”

Vivid Prose is in the DetailsHow to write more colorful prose by Betty Kelly Sargent for BookWorks.com

Writing with this ease and control and sensitivity to our senses is not easy at first.  You have to teach yourself to be alert to all the details of what’s happening around you.  What does the street look like after the rain, what are your friends wearing at dinner, how does the new car smell, how does the baby lamb feel in your arms?  Carry a notebook and every time a sensual impression takes your breath away, jot it down. If you keep a journal, pay attention to the colors around you, how things look, taste and feel, and you will be well on your way to writing more engaging, vivid prose. But don’t overdo it. You want lively, visual prose, not purple prose.


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